what i lick to do
Things I lick to do that i think is fun.Shooting my bow and arrow and i lick to run and climb.find new thing's i lick to play video games and make thing's and shot thing's and i lick to play with my robot i have a video of my robot and ride bikes at the skate park and that is all i lick to do.
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Good report on what you like to do. I see lots of details. It needs a beginning sentence that covers all of what you are talking about and an ending sentence tha concludes the paragraph.
ReplyDeleteGood, you put in a introduction. It needs a period between the word fun and shooting. Read your introduction sentence out loud and see if you can tell what needs fixed. Your paragraph has many details, good job. It has a conclusion sentence that is just attached to the end of another sentence. Can you improve the conclusion sentence? Add some periods and capital letters. Words misspelled: like, things, shoot. You are an important person so always capitalize the word "I". I can tell you worked hard to list the many things you like to do. Keep up the good work.
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